2011年3月2日 星期三

Attutude is everything

Ben was an energetic college student, all he loved to do was exercising. He was enthusiastic about running since he was a child. In fact, he had won many first prizes in the running contests. Not long ago, he just won the Olympic Games and got first prize in the running competition. As a consequence, he not only became a celebrity but also got a great deal of money. However, accidents happened. Ben ran into a serious car accident and was heavily injured on his way home. When he woke up, he found that everything had changed. The doctor told him that he couldn’t run anymore. So incredible was the news that Ben couldn’t face the music until he accepted his family and friends’ encouragement and company. Ben recovered from the bad wound gradually after several months’ treatment. Nevertheless, Ben’s passion for running didn’t disappear. He kept on working as possible as he could. As he wanted to become the best runner in the world, he exercised to strive for his best and he was convinced that “Practice makes perfect”. Many people were moved by Ben’s perseverance. Thus, the host of the running contest awarded the best attitude pride for Ben. Ben’s attitude toward his favorite thing set a good example for the public. And we can learn from Ben’s bravery and become a man of courage.

7 則留言:

  1. 第三行 he just won the Olympic Game 不知道可不可以這樣寫欸,如果寫won a first prize at the Olympic Game可能會比較好

    倒數第四行,“Practice makes perfect”. 句號放在引號裡吧?!

    還有the host of the running contest awarded the best attitude pride for Ben是"頒最佳精神獎給Ben"嗎?

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  2. Ben was an energetic college student, all he loved to do was exercising.沒有連接詞唷~~

    He was enthusiastic about running since he was a child.
    有since耶~前面改成完成式

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  3. 第一句要有連接詞吧

    since 要搭配連接詞吧

    倒數第三行 the best attitude pride(你是要打pride還是prize呀)

    And(這個and有多餘的感覺... 嗎??!) we can learn from Ben's bravery and become a man of courage.

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  4. since 要搭配完成式吧

    ...打錯=\=

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  5. However, accidents happened.->Suddenly,~會不會比較好

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  6. 我覺得你可以分個段落讓讀的人比較方便看

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  7. accidents改單數吧
    不然他好可憐:(

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